The person you choose to look over your statement should be checking everything. Along with grammar and spelling errors they should check the tone of the paper, the flow of the paper, and the overall style of the paper. So, it makes sense that the person you choose to look over your admission essay should be well tuned in writing. Additionally, they should also be able to let you know if there is anything they feel you should omit or add. Once you have made the changes they recommend, then you should have them re_read your personal statement to ensure quality. If you want to be ultra_safe, then have yet another set of fresh eyeballs look over your revised personal statement.
5. WRITE A STRONG CONCLUSION. Your conclusion is the last best opportunity to showcase your commitment to the profession of medicine and the long road of study ahead. It is important that your personal statement sound strong to the very last period on the page. The conclusion should "frame" your introduction, in that it refers back to the beginning of your statement, reminding the reader of who you are, where you are coming from, and re_emphasizing the significance of your over_all theme. An emphatic conclusion demonstrates consistency and brings everything full circle. Do not digress to a subordinate topic or introduce, however inadvertently, another theme altogether (which is why framing is a good way to end the statement _ it allows you to check if you are still saying the same thing you started out with). The point is to end on the high note you began with.