B. Consult the opinions of your advisor/mentor/colleagues _ Allow someone to read through your essay. Ask for their opinions and keep these in mind. Do not forget that you can still revise your essay even up to your targeted day of submission.
Empty Words _ Since most personal statements are about 5μ lines, you don't have space for empty statements such as 'I am a hard worker' or 'I am a people person'. How can the hiring manager ascertain that this is the truth without any evidence to back up such lofty statements? You need to give them examples of your work ethic and how it positively impacted your employer as well as evidence of your interpersonal skills.