Empty Words _ Since most personal statements are about 5μ lines, you don't have space for empty statements such as 'I am a hard worker' or 'I am a people person'. How can the hiring manager ascertain that this is the truth without any evidence to back up such lofty statements? You need to give them examples of your work ethic and how it positively impacted your employer as well as evidence of your interpersonal skills.
One approach is to begin with an interesting statement, then follow it with a brief overview of your main theme. e creative with your introductory paragraph. Another approach to make it unique is to use personal information that distinguishes you from the rest and makes the essay stand out from others. Another approach is to use a fact or a literary concept, which is relevant to your theme. Paraphrase it or use a direct quote, and add in whatever point you are trying to make. As much as you would like to present a good introduction, do not fall into the trap of making hasty generalizations, sweeping statements, and/or other pronunciations. Keep the tone light and personal. After all, you are telling your own story.