2. BE POSITIVE. Your statement should not sound staged or stilted, but enthusiastic and motivated. Consider topics which would be easiest for you to put descriptive words to. Your personal statement is a testament of your passions and your earnestness, the image you want the reviewing committee to see of you. That image should never be negative, bland, or boring; you want the committee to say, on reading your statement, we'd like to meet this person. Avoid using "waffle" words (words which qualify your experiences and commitment) such as "rather", "quite", "somewhat", or "probably". Waffle words tend to give the impression the writer is unsure of him or herself; with the personal statement, all writing should be positive and express confidence and directness.
The body _ To compose the body, go back to your theme and identify the major ideas that could support that theme (which has now become your main thesis statement). Each point should be supported by specific evidence, examples, or arguments. Quantify your achievements and use clear, positive language. Write about unique personal information because this is what the evaluations committee wants to read. Continue brainstorming. Write the topic sentence for your first body paragraph. Make sure it provides a focus for your paragraph and is not overly general. Do the same for the other body paragraphs. To generate interest, try searching for examples related to the literature (direct quotes, paraphrasing, etc.) that you can use in your first body paragraph. Use your outline as guide and present the information in full sentences that flow logically from one to the next. After writing down all your points, arrange these points such that they smoothly follow one section after another. Next, write your concluding statements for each paragraph. Note that it should clearly state the point you are trying to make and lead it into your next body paragraph. Use concrete examples from your life experiences to support your theme and distinguish yourself from other applicants.