Let us move on to the contents of the personal statements. As such, there is no one proper way to inscribe personal statements. However, generally, the academic officers who read your essay will be interested to look into two important aspects emerging from the statement. One being how you are presenting the evidence of your achievements that is not reflected anywhere else in your application; the other being the description of how and why the episodes of your life have shaped your attitude, focus, and, of all your intellectual verve.
Another problem often discovered at this stage is the presence of too many short sentences and paragraphs that seem choppy and abrupt. As a solution, try to develop these into longer, more graceful sentences. Formal writing generally utilizes longer sentences, so try using more compound and complex sentences. Using long sentences add flavor and variety to your writing, not to mention the fact that it also showcases your proficiency with words. You can also consider the word_count limit at this time and begin omitting unnecessary details that may only bog down your essay and make it unfocused. How can information be "condensed" while keeping the essence and maintaining the relevance of the essay? You can remove adverbs and excessive modifiers, as well as transform detailed sections to general statements.