The most convincing personal statements often consist of your academic records, accomplishments, and extra_curricular activities. It may also include any incredible circumstances, challenges, or adversities you have faced and the manner in which those bottlenecks have been overcome. There is nothing wrong in mentioning about your initiative, inspiration, headship, perseverance, and your ample experience in moving with other cultures. In short, all positive qualities or all achievements in light of the opportunities available to you can be mentioned.
The introduction _ This may sound strange but saving the introduction for last is more advantageous than it may seem. Having written the body and the conclusion, you are now in the best position to tell the reader, as creatively as possible, what they are reading into. In the introduction, explain your thesis statement and how you are going to affirm it without being too specific. Do not use typical introductions such as"This essay is about..." or "The topic of this essay is..." or "I will now show that..." It is not only boring but also uncreative.