5. Suggest that the program can right a wrong by admitting you _ Remember that the committee members are busy professionals who are taking only a couple minutes to skim your statement. On the one hand, asserting that you will make a unique contribution to your program and bring a new perspective by adding to the diversity of their student body is a smart move and shows you as a positive, professional team player. On the other hand, asking for admission on the grounds that it will correct a previous injustice runs the risk of making you appear unqualified and/or confrontationalǒ. Be sarcastic _ This one doesn't need much explanation. Your ironic commentaries and sarcastic quips make your Facebook friends laugh, because they know you. The admissions committee does not. They can easily misinterpret sarcastic comments, or decide you're flippant, cynical, pessimistic, or a know_it_all.
Face it there are only so many spots on the roster with the school you may be looking to gain access to. Reviewers will be looking over countless application as well as countless personal statements which allows you a great opportunity to stand out from the rest by writing a statement that is leaps and bounds above the rest. By doing so, you are giving yourself a great leg up on the competition. When you go about employing the fresh eyes others to look over your personal statement before you turn it in, you will be ensuring that your one shot to impress is in fact your best shot.