6. REVISE, REVISE, REVISE. Have another person (several persons) critique your work. Use fellow students, trusted professors, your parents or significant other _ anyone who will read your statement closely and give you constructive advice. You, yourself, should read your statement out loud; the ear will hear errors (sentence fragments, grammatical missteps) the eye misses. Be aware of unconscious mistakes, like starting every sentence with the work "I", using cliches (example: saying you want to be a doctor to "help people"), or over_stating or exaggerating accomplishments or emotions. Once satisfied, put the statement down, do not over_write it and drain it of all intensity and enthusiasm. Lastly, think on this. Your personal statement is your opportunity to tell your "story" and a window into your humanity _ ultimately, that is what makes it engaging and memorable to the schools you are applying to.
The reader of your medical school application is expecting a degree of proof and really wants to know how you know. It's not enough for you to say you want to help people. How do you know what you want to do in medicine, what have you done that leads you to know that? How to write your medical school personal statement: Persuasion The most persuasive way to answer this question is by sharing experiential knowledge. You would say to an admissions official in conversation, "I know because I've done it. That's how I know. And I can give a specific story."