But you've got to sound: Like you care a lot, and like you're completely devoted to it. An example: "I am completely devoted to medicine for the rest of my life. It's everything for me because it's the only thing that's going to allow me to express who I am personally and professionally." High_impact language has this very strong absolute, emotionally rich, concrete side to it where as a reader I am completely engrossed, engaged, enmeshed. I buy it. I believe you. Some of the best places to look for this kind of writing is where there is someone who is making a very impassioned speech. One of the best places that I know is in the most powerful, compelling, moving speeches of our time. Like Martin Luther King's "I Have A Dream," or speeches by Gandhi, or speeches by John F. Kennedy, or speeches by Barack Obama. Speeches that really elevate you and make you feel that there's hope for you, hope for us and that there's something bigger to strive for.
4. Be cute or funny _ Maturity is one of the most common adjectives admissions committees use to describe the ideal graduate or professional school student. You are applying to eventually become their colleague, a fellow professional. Show them you take their time, their program, your future, and yourself seriously by maintaining a positive and professional tone. Unless the application directs you to submit a creative writing sample, leave the stand_up routine for the comedy club.