But you've got to sound: Like you care a lot, and like you're completely devoted to it. An example: "I am completely devoted to medicine for the rest of my life. It's everything for me because it's the only thing that's going to allow me to express who I am personally and professionally." High_impact language has this very strong absolute, emotionally rich, concrete side to it where as a reader I am completely engrossed, engaged, enmeshed. I buy it. I believe you. Some of the best places to look for this kind of writing is where there is someone who is making a very impassioned speech. One of the best places that I know is in the most powerful, compelling, moving speeches of our time. Like Martin Luther King's "I Have A Dream," or speeches by Gandhi, or speeches by John F. Kennedy, or speeches by Barack Obama. Speeches that really elevate you and make you feel that there's hope for you, hope for us and that there's something bigger to strive for.
This is why so many people choose to opt for help in writing their personal statement for college. For me, it was easy. My mother was an award winning writer, and I could ask her for her feedback any time I wanted (I still can, as a matter of fact) and as often as I want to. Although we don't always see agree, her invaluable input is always intelligent and well thought out. She helped me a lot on my personal statement for college, as well as my essays. But for people who don't have that kind of resource at their easy disposal, or a high school English teacher whose opinion they value, there are many sites and resources all over the internet which can help them to write a personal statement for college professionally. These can give feedback, editing, and can even give you templates and tips advising you the most common things to avoid, and the most important things to do when writing your personal statement for college. In my opinion, though, there is no real alternative to personal, face to face feedback from someone whom you trust on your personal statement for college write up. It is not easy to write a professional personal statement. Most of us struggle with the writing.