Overly Technical _ In many cases, the person reading your resume and personal statement will be part of a different department to the one where you are applying to work. Therefore, he may have no knowledge of the more technical aspects of the position so avoid the use of jargon. Your personal statement should be concise, informative and enjoyable and should be understandable to all readers. Vivid imagery always captures the attention of the reader so work on your writing skills! A strong resume needs to be backed up with an equally powerful and compelling personal statement if you want to get through to the first round of interviews. Take the time to craft your statement and you'll immediately be ahead of the majority of candidates who continue to make the above errors.
In some ways you are very lucky because your experience of high school, hobbies and life experience will already be different from many UK/ home students so you should take advantage of this in your personal statement. But you also need to make 2 things very clear. Firstly, why do you want to study in the UK and secondly, you need to show that your English is of a good standard (usually IELTS 6ǌ or above). It is no good having IELTS 6Ǒ if you personal statement is full of grammar and spelling mistakes. But DO NOT pay for someone to write your personal statement for you on one of the many websites offering this service. If you have IELTS 6Ǒ, you do not have perfect native speaker style English and universities may reject your application if they suspect it is not your writing.