2. BE POSITIVE. Your statement should not sound staged or stilted, but enthusiastic and motivated. Consider topics which would be easiest for you to put descriptive words to. Your personal statement is a testament of your passions and your earnestness, the image you want the reviewing committee to see of you. That image should never be negative, bland, or boring; you want the committee to say, on reading your statement, we'd like to meet this person. Avoid using "waffle" words (words which qualify your experiences and commitment) such as "rather", "quite", "somewhat", or "probably". Waffle words tend to give the impression the writer is unsure of him or herself; with the personal statement, all writing should be positive and express confidence and directness.
Telling Them You Want the Job _ The hiring manager already knows that you want the job, otherwise you wouldn't have applied yet applicants insist on telling the prospective employer how much they enjoy their line of work and their desire to work for the company. Your personal statement should focus on the reasons WHY you should be hired, NOT why you want the job.