Focusing on negativity _ People face problems from time to time; however, there are those who have faced graver trials than others. If you are one of those people who's had your fair share of problems, make sure that you adopt a positive attitude despite the challenges, and reflect this attitude in your statement. Wallowing in negativity will give off an unfavorable vibe, and enumerating all the trials you've been through will no longer make your essay an interesting read.
Check for logical flow and paragraph transition which make the statement strong and easily read. _ Read the personal statement over _ if you need to read any of the sentences twice, and then re_structure them. Have I left myself too short on an important area and too long in another? Cut and chop away until you know that this statement is strong, logical and captures the attention of the reader. If you step over a platitude or cliché _ remove and find another way. At the same time _ give yourself a limit of how many reviews you will do, otherwise you will keep chopping and changing losing the essence of what you are writing. _ Lastly, peer review _ a person or people you can trust to be brutally honest and who knows you well. Preferably someone who also understands that this personal statement is for admission to graduate school. Get several people to give you a boredom rating along with a rating of whether or not you have truly reflected who you are.