Keep It Readable _ You will also want to keep your personal statement/essay to a readable length and writing style. Trying to use large words and convoluted sentences to make the personal sound more impressive will only lead the reader to put the paper down.
When you choose someone to look over your admission essay, you should choose someone who will not be afraid to tell you like it is. In other words, don't just show it to your mom or your significant other. When you show it to someone who isn't afraid to give you criticisms then you are doing yourself a giant favor. Remember, those who review it when you turn it in will be looking not only for the good, but the bad as well. If your statement is not among the good, then it will get weeded out with the rest of the bad.