Overly Technical _ In many cases, the person reading your resume and personal statement will be part of a different department to the one where you are applying to work. Therefore, he may have no knowledge of the more technical aspects of the position so avoid the use of jargon. Your personal statement should be concise, informative and enjoyable and should be understandable to all readers. Vivid imagery always captures the attention of the reader so work on your writing skills! A strong resume needs to be backed up with an equally powerful and compelling personal statement if you want to get through to the first round of interviews. Take the time to craft your statement and you'll immediately be ahead of the majority of candidates who continue to make the above errors.
A while ago, I was asked to take a critical look at a personal statement, which spanned the student's life from age two to eighteen. The personal statement made gripping reading but was far too long and the student had not been selective enough in the abundance of material she choose from. The word count ran to 1귔 words _ far too long for a personal statement. The task of reducing your personal statement can be enthusiastically undertaken, but the problem is that you need to look at your original brainstormed ideas to organise your material for the selection process. The only criterion you need to apply at this stage is this incident of sufficient interest to the admission officer.