Check for logical flow and paragraph transition which make the statement strong and easily read. _ Read the personal statement over _ if you need to read any of the sentences twice, and then re_structure them. Have I left myself too short on an important area and too long in another? Cut and chop away until you know that this statement is strong, logical and captures the attention of the reader. If you step over a platitude or cliché _ remove and find another way. At the same time _ give yourself a limit of how many reviews you will do, otherwise you will keep chopping and changing losing the essence of what you are writing. _ Lastly, peer review _ a person or people you can trust to be brutally honest and who knows you well. Preferably someone who also understands that this personal statement is for admission to graduate school. Get several people to give you a boredom rating along with a rating of whether or not you have truly reflected who you are.
8. Show your inferiority complex or your superiority complex _ Many applicants have trouble striking the balance between promoting themselves and not coming off as arrogant in their personal statement. A personal statement is a marketing document and has to showcase your strengths. Yet many applicants err on the side of humility, such as using self_deprecating language; or describing weaknesses and previous failings without explaining how they've worked to turn those weaknesses into strengths. Admissions committees do not admit candidates out of pity! Other applicants err on the side of conceit, giving the impression that they don't really need any advanced training because they know so much about the field and have so much experience. They fail to describe what they expect to gain from a specialized course of education. You want to walk the line between these extremes. Assert that you are very well_qualified to begin this course of study, and that you have the preparation, motivation, maturity and focus they seek. Then stress your planned specialization, what you will gain from attending their program, and how you need the training they offer to succeed as a professional.