Telling Them You Want the Job _ The hiring manager already knows that you want the job, otherwise you wouldn't have applied yet applicants insist on telling the prospective employer how much they enjoy their line of work and their desire to work for the company. Your personal statement should focus on the reasons WHY you should be hired, NOT why you want the job.
Check for grammar, punctuation and spelling. If you're not confident about these aspects then ask someone you can trust or hire a professional to check the personal statement. _ Review your statement and ask these questions: _ Have I answered the questions required? _ Have I put forward the best examples of experiences and effects that are relevant to my field of study or who I am? _ Have I effectively answered the main question here _ Why should the Graduate School accept me over my fellow applicant? _ Does this statement reflect who I really am or do I sound like a "too good to be true" parrot? _ Would I fall asleep if I had to read this or would it grab my attention? _ Have I let my sense of humor get carried away? Do I sound too opinionated or extreme in my views? _ Have I addressed any weaknesses I have e.g. low GPA or LSAT?