But you've got to sound: Like you care a lot, and like you're completely devoted to it. An example: "I am completely devoted to medicine for the rest of my life. It's everything for me because it's the only thing that's going to allow me to express who I am personally and professionally." High_impact language has this very strong absolute, emotionally rich, concrete side to it where as a reader I am completely engrossed, engaged, enmeshed. I buy it. I believe you. Some of the best places to look for this kind of writing is where there is someone who is making a very impassioned speech. One of the best places that I know is in the most powerful, compelling, moving speeches of our time. Like Martin Luther King's "I Have A Dream," or speeches by Gandhi, or speeches by John F. Kennedy, or speeches by Barack Obama. Speeches that really elevate you and make you feel that there's hope for you, hope for us and that there's something bigger to strive for.
Revising and proofreading _ Upon examining your essay and discovering a few unwanted elements or grammatical mistakes, it is now time to start revising it. First, search for grammatical mistakes and spelling errors. The prompts in most MS Windows programs help you identify these (green squiggles for grammatical mistakes and red squiggles for spelling errors). As long as they do not appear under proper names, it is safe to modify them. However, do not rely exclusively on your computer for spell checks. Go over each word on your own.