"The prospect of helping people has driven me to fulfil many goals in life and this is truly my dream. Although it is great to have ambitions _ I now want to translate my goals into reality. Becoming a nurse is a natural extension of my interest in medicine. Following graduation, I found myself advising investment bankers on the stock exchange, secretly desiring the opportunity of helping others overcome illness and promote health."
The words and phases often used to build up tension include: intimidated; heart pounded; ferocity. Thus, tension and suspense is built up so that metaphorically, we hold out breath impelled to read on to find out "what happens next." How to edit your personal statement for university submission _ When you've finished the actual writing, what do you do? Well, for a start, don't be in a hurry to send off your personal statement before checking it. Few, if any, experienced writers never need to revise their work. Some do as they proceed but most will get their first Personal Statement draft down on paper without worrying too much how it's written, and then, when it's finished, go over it, pruning, polishing and tightening the general content. Therefore, this section is about how to edit the personal statement. It is advisable to check the following: _ oThat you haven't been over_lavish with adjectives and adverbs. If you find you have, customer some of the former and, where possible, exchange the latter for stronger verbs. _ oThreat you haven't used clichés or hackneyed phrases bit have found fresh images always of describing yourself in the best possible light.