You already know that your personal statement could be the one factor that keeps you out, or lets you into the school of your dreams, but you may not know how important it is to have a fresh set of eyes on it before you turn it in. While you may have read over your personal statement several times, there are still reasons that you will want someone else to read it over as well.
Remember that tension, like all techniques, is merely another tool for making your writing more vivid and interesting to read. However, if you do use it, you must make it clear to your readers that the events you are describing have some relation to your study topic. If not, they will be confused, will have to re_read to make sense of it and may end up feeling irritated enough to stop reading.