The introduction and the body of the PS should be about your career and achievements. This is the area of the PS where you should demonstrate your capabilities and provide a compelling argument as to why you should be admitted. For freshman applicants, a PS should reflect one's background_for example, family, community, or school_and explain how this background has shaped one's dreams and aspirations. For transfer applicants, identify the intended major. Discuss how one's interest in the subject developed and describe any experiences in the field. This could include volunteer work, internships and employment, and participation in student organizations and activities. It is important to include what has been gained from one's involvement. It is good to elaborate on personal qualities, talents, accomplishments, and contributions or experiences that hold significance to you as an applicant. You should consider including personal qualities or accomplishments that you are proud of and include the ways these helped shape who you are.
oMake sure you haven't constantly used the same word in the same paragraph. This can be very irritating to the admissions officer and it only needs a little more thought to re_word or, very often, it can be omitted without affecting the sense. A thesaurus is useful for finding alternative words.