The entire college admission process is grueling and psychologically taxing, but little is worse off than writing the personal statement for college applications. At first, you may think that the personal statement for college is going to be easy; just sit down and write a few words about what inspires you, or what you want to accomplish, etc and that's it. However, personal statements for college are more than that. You see, the fact is that when you are in high school, you probably have not much to do as far as writing is concerned. You could easily breeze through on the five paragraph essay, and write an endless series of meaningless papers, getting straight A's, as well as they are properly organized and formatted.
Another problem often discovered at this stage is the presence of too many short sentences and paragraphs that seem choppy and abrupt. As a solution, try to develop these into longer, more graceful sentences. Formal writing generally utilizes longer sentences, so try using more compound and complex sentences. Using long sentences add flavor and variety to your writing, not to mention the fact that it also showcases your proficiency with words. You can also consider the word_count limit at this time and begin omitting unnecessary details that may only bog down your essay and make it unfocused. How can information be "condensed" while keeping the essence and maintaining the relevance of the essay? You can remove adverbs and excessive modifiers, as well as transform detailed sections to general statements.