Focusing on negativity _ People face problems from time to time; however, there are those who have faced graver trials than others. If you are one of those people who's had your fair share of problems, make sure that you adopt a positive attitude despite the challenges, and reflect this attitude in your statement. Wallowing in negativity will give off an unfavorable vibe, and enumerating all the trials you've been through will no longer make your essay an interesting read.
Avoid Cliches. There are a few standard reasons why people become doctors, and so it is very easy to fall into cliched expressions and ideas. Though it's fine to express a commonly_held notion, try to find a personal way to express it. For example, rather than write "I want to be a doctor because I want to help people," discuss the ways that you have shown your generosity and kindheartedness in the past; bring specific examples__such as your volunteer experiences__so as to avoid a direct (and possibly cliched) declaration of your point. Sometimes cliches are unavoidable; just make sure your essay isn't full of them.