Lousy samples and excerpts _ Some sites, which provide personal statement samples, also provide excerpts based on personal or biographic information submitted. These statements are often delivered after you have provided them with personal information such as achievements, experiences, academic background, and your motivations for taking up the course. However, if the samples provided to you do not reflect your achievements and goals as an incoming student, you might want to look somewhere else. A good sample, outline, or excerpt should be comprehensive, interesting, and highly useful.
2. BE POSITIVE. Your statement should not sound staged or stilted, but enthusiastic and motivated. Consider topics which would be easiest for you to put descriptive words to. Your personal statement is a testament of your passions and your earnestness, the image you want the reviewing committee to see of you. That image should never be negative, bland, or boring; you want the committee to say, on reading your statement, we'd like to meet this person. Avoid using "waffle" words (words which qualify your experiences and commitment) such as "rather", "quite", "somewhat", or "probably". Waffle words tend to give the impression the writer is unsure of him or herself; with the personal statement, all writing should be positive and express confidence and directness.