Often, the first draft is not the essay you originally envisioned. You might even discover that your ideas about your theme have changed as you have been writing. If you do not like the way certain sections are stated, re_arrange them. Once you are pleased with the body, make sure the conclusion and introduction still match it and complement the way you see your topic at this point. If not, rewrite them to fit the essay you did write and the way you see your topic now.
Keep it short and sweet _ It's tempting to write after page of additional information to include in your personal statement. To be most effective, however, you should cap your statement at no more than one page, or about three paragraphs. The last thing you want to do is bore the person reading your application. So find one or two things you'd like to talk about and address these points strongly. Try to make your statement pop__use strong words, active voice and short paragraphs. The goal should be to make your reader want to know more after reading your piece, not be thankful that it's finally over.