Often, the first draft is not the essay you originally envisioned. You might even discover that your ideas about your theme have changed as you have been writing. If you do not like the way certain sections are stated, re_arrange them. Once you are pleased with the body, make sure the conclusion and introduction still match it and complement the way you see your topic at this point. If not, rewrite them to fit the essay you did write and the way you see your topic now.
Check for grammar, punctuation and spelling. If you're not confident about these aspects then ask someone you can trust or hire a professional to check the personal statement. _ Review your statement and ask these questions: _ Have I answered the questions required? _ Have I put forward the best examples of experiences and effects that are relevant to my field of study or who I am? _ Have I effectively answered the main question here _ Why should the Graduate School accept me over my fellow applicant? _ Does this statement reflect who I really am or do I sound like a "too good to be true" parrot? _ Would I fall asleep if I had to read this or would it grab my attention? _ Have I let my sense of humor get carried away? Do I sound too opinionated or extreme in my views? _ Have I addressed any weaknesses I have e.g. low GPA or LSAT?