If you wish to use Sample Outline A, you may want to consult this simple instructional outline: Introduction Section 2 Topic sentence related to the main theme First supporting pointE vidence Topic sentence that relates the above paragraph to the next Second supporting point Evidence Topic sentence that relates the above paragraph to the next Second supporting point Evidence Conclusion Conclusion that reiterates the main theme and echoes the ideas stated in the introduction _ Making a list of all information to be disclosed _ Armed with a theme and an outline, the next step is to consider which aspects of your personal background and experiences can be shared in relation to this theme. To fully present all the information you want included, it is imperative you gather them and make a list from which you will be able to back up the thesis statements you will compose later on. Creating a list allows you to identify which information is important (e.g., why I chose this major) and which information should be considered optional in relation to your theme. Keep in mind that all information should be related to the main theme and should serve to substantiate the theme and not deviate from it.
Show, Don't Tell. This is one of the most difficult (but also one of the most important) skills to incorporate into your essay. "Showing and not telling" means that you ground your essay in specific details. Rather than simply asserting a big idea, you describe the experience surrounding it. Consider the following two examples: a) Because I was often sick, I learned one of my most important values in life: to make the most of my time and create a meaningful existence. b) When I was little, I was often sick. I would spend days in bed, and as an active kid, I hated the enforced stillness. I used to complain ceaselessly to my parents__but rather than let me succumb to self_pity, my parents would force me to make the most of my time. And as I painted, built Lego castles, and wrote crazy madlibs (quite badly!), I learned something important about myself: that I could be happy so long as I was productive. Do you see the difference? The first example offers a statement of personal belief__ but because it is just a factual declaration, it sounds as though it could have been written by anyone. The second example offers the same idea, but shows us rather than tells us about it. As a result, it is personal and unique, and makes the writer stand out as an applicant.