Long before you have reached the point of revision, however, it is important that you personal statement is intended as a selling tool for you to gain entry to your chosen university. If you wish to interest the reader it is important that you are your own critic. You will need to prune and polish, check grammar and spelling, take another look at your style: in fact, you may need to re_write your first few sentences to ensure your personal statement is powerful and will capture your readers attention instantly. A great way to help with this is to read sample personal statements these samples will give you a clear idea of how you may improve your opening.
The introduction and the body of the PS should be about your career and achievements. This is the area of the PS where you should demonstrate your capabilities and provide a compelling argument as to why you should be admitted. For freshman applicants, a PS should reflect one's background_for example, family, community, or school_and explain how this background has shaped one's dreams and aspirations. For transfer applicants, identify the intended major. Discuss how one's interest in the subject developed and describe any experiences in the field. This could include volunteer work, internships and employment, and participation in student organizations and activities. It is important to include what has been gained from one's involvement. It is good to elaborate on personal qualities, talents, accomplishments, and contributions or experiences that hold significance to you as an applicant. You should consider including personal qualities or accomplishments that you are proud of and include the ways these helped shape who you are.