Show, Don't Tell. This is one of the most difficult (but also one of the most important) skills to incorporate into your essay. "Showing and not telling" means that you ground your essay in specific details. Rather than simply asserting a big idea, you describe the experience surrounding it. Consider the following two examples: a) Because I was often sick, I learned one of my most important values in life: to make the most of my time and create a meaningful existence. b) When I was little, I was often sick. I would spend days in bed, and as an active kid, I hated the enforced stillness. I used to complain ceaselessly to my parents__but rather than let me succumb to self_pity, my parents would force me to make the most of my time. And as I painted, built Lego castles, and wrote crazy madlibs (quite badly!), I learned something important about myself: that I could be happy so long as I was productive. Do you see the difference? The first example offers a statement of personal belief__ but because it is just a factual declaration, it sounds as though it could have been written by anyone. The second example offers the same idea, but shows us rather than tells us about it. As a result, it is personal and unique, and makes the writer stand out as an applicant.
This is why so many people choose to opt for help in writing their personal statement for college. For me, it was easy. My mother was an award winning writer, and I could ask her for her feedback any time I wanted (I still can, as a matter of fact) and as often as I want to. Although we don't always see agree, her invaluable input is always intelligent and well thought out. She helped me a lot on my personal statement for college, as well as my essays. But for people who don't have that kind of resource at their easy disposal, or a high school English teacher whose opinion they value, there are many sites and resources all over the internet which can help them to write a personal statement for college professionally. These can give feedback, editing, and can even give you templates and tips advising you the most common things to avoid, and the most important things to do when writing your personal statement for college. In my opinion, though, there is no real alternative to personal, face to face feedback from someone whom you trust on your personal statement for college write up. It is not easy to write a professional personal statement. Most of us struggle with the writing.