After grammar and spelling, the next problem that needs be checked is transition. Read your essay. Go through it from end to end, and check to see if your essay flows smoothly. Does each sentence flow smoothly to the next? Does each paragraph flow logically to the next? Each statement should be connected or somehow related to the one before it, not thrown randomly together. Next, limit the use of "I" in the beginning of most sentences as it is already obvious that the essay is a piece written by an individual.
This is a chronological presentation of basic information on the applicant. Depending on one's preference, the amount of information on one's past and future can be adjusted. _ Introduction (a quote, an interesting story, an anecdote, etc.) _ Personal/Family Background _ Academic and non_academic/co_curricular achievements while in school (Research works undertaken, trainings attended, etc.) _ Interest in the field _ Reason/s for choosing the school _ Plans for the future _ Conclusion