Lousy samples and excerpts _ Some sites, which provide personal statement samples, also provide excerpts based on personal or biographic information submitted. These statements are often delivered after you have provided them with personal information such as achievements, experiences, academic background, and your motivations for taking up the course. However, if the samples provided to you do not reflect your achievements and goals as an incoming student, you might want to look somewhere else. A good sample, outline, or excerpt should be comprehensive, interesting, and highly useful.
Address Your Weaknesses (If Necessary). The personal statement presents an opportunity to address weaknesses in your applications and offer explanations as to why things went wrong. Drawing attention to the low points in your application is a risky business, and pulling this off correctly can be tricky. If you feel it necessary to justify or explain something, first ask yourself the following two questions: a) Is this issue worth mentioning? b) Does your explanation legitimize the deficiency? For example, there is no need to address the fact that you received a B in physics. On the other hand, a failing grade in physics is something that is probably worth addressing. If you failed physics because you found it too hard or simply got lazy, it is better to leave the issue unmentioned. A deficiency resulting from circumstances beyond your control, such as an illness or death of a loved one, is something that the admissions committee and your interviewer should know about. When addressing a weakness or deficiency, strive to incorporate that section into your essay so that the essay maintains its flow and focus. Suddenly presenting an idea without connecting it to the rest of your essay will seem jarring and out_of_place to the reader. If the issue is important enough, you may in fact want to build your entire essay's theme around that point.