oMake sure you haven't used over long, unwieldy sentences or paragraphs. If you have you must break these up. _ oThat you've started your personal statement with a powerful introduction so this captures your reader's attention _ straight away. oThat your structure is easy to follow and that each sentence hooks into the next line. oThat you finish with your future career goals. _ A key advantage is to use a professional to edit and improve your personal statement. If, however you are working in isolation and do not have that advantage, be wary of allowing family or friends to read and comment on it. For one thing, an outside will be objective and critical: they may be full of praise or go to the other extreme so far as style, at least, is concerned.
Using a sample statement as a guide _ You can use a sample personal statement in different ways, although the primarily goal in using a sample would be for you to be able to write a compelling and interesting personal statement. One way is to create your own outline to organize your thoughts and your story better. You can also make use of sample excerpts when writing a strong and interesting introduction to your essay.