After grammar and spelling, the next problem that needs be checked is transition. Read your essay. Go through it from end to end, and check to see if your essay flows smoothly. Does each sentence flow smoothly to the next? Does each paragraph flow logically to the next? Each statement should be connected or somehow related to the one before it, not thrown randomly together. Next, limit the use of "I" in the beginning of most sentences as it is already obvious that the essay is a piece written by an individual.
How to write a medical school personal statement that works: Let go of all of your worries and your doubts and come at it from the point of view that you have read 5ꯠ medical school essays in your life and you know they're all about the same thing. (I want to be a doctor, I want to help people.) You've got to stand away from that position and really develop your medical school personal essay as though it were a dialogue between you and your reader. But since you can't wait for the reader to ask you questions, you have to anticipate what they might say by mentally asking yourself questions and answering them. So what are the questions that a medical school admissions committee member might ask you in a conversation?