When you choose someone to look over your admission essay, you should choose someone who will not be afraid to tell you like it is. In other words, don't just show it to your mom or your significant other. When you show it to someone who isn't afraid to give you criticisms then you are doing yourself a giant favor. Remember, those who review it when you turn it in will be looking not only for the good, but the bad as well. If your statement is not among the good, then it will get weeded out with the rest of the bad.
What is a Personal Statement? In terms of content, a PS is a formal essay stating your personal and academic background, pertinent achievements, goals, qualities, and characteristics, which might help influence the decision of the admissions committee to accept you in your school of choice. Perhaps, the most important point we should consider is that a PS is required by most schools as their method of gauging a few important factors: _ Obtaining a glimpse into your personality, which they cannot observe just by perusing your transcript; _ Evaluating the way you organize your thoughts; and _ Checking your level of English proficiency.