Use of inappropriate topics _ There are certain topics that should not be discussed in your personal statement and, therefore, should not be included in statement samples. A tatement should not mention poor grades, political leanings, and pointless gimmicks. If an example statement includes topics about political opinions or is too lengthy to the extent that it no longer makes any sense, you need to search for a better sample online. Using a sample as a guide when writing a statement is highly useful; however, not all samples are actually reliable. By learning to pinpoint the telltale signs of a bad statement example, you can find a better sample to help you write a winning admissions essay for your college, graduate school, or law school applications.
An excellent introduction _ The first goal of any PS is to generate a compelling lead and engage the readers. Start with a powerful selling point to catch the reader's (usually an admission officer) eye. Given the high volume of application submissions, admission officers generally give each personal statement a quick scan before separating the outstanding submissions for a more thorough reading. Therefore, it is extremely important for the personal statement, specifically the lead, to be compelling and unique. This means that your words need to be short and punchy. The members of an admissions committee pore over thousands of submissions on a daily basis. From these, only a handful will catch their attention from the outset. They do not have the time to go over each of these essays, thus an essay's introduction should be arresting enough to make the readers want to continue reading on. An excellent introduction is therefore crucial if you wish your essay to stand out from the rest. In the next section, we will present ways to achieve an excellent introduction and some samples to demonstrate these.