The introduction and the body of the PS should be about your career and achievements. This is the area of the PS where you should demonstrate your capabilities and provide a compelling argument as to why you should be admitted. For freshman applicants, a PS should reflect one's background_for example, family, community, or school_and explain how this background has shaped one's dreams and aspirations. For transfer applicants, identify the intended major. Discuss how one's interest in the subject developed and describe any experiences in the field. This could include volunteer work, internships and employment, and participation in student organizations and activities. It is important to include what has been gained from one's involvement. It is good to elaborate on personal qualities, talents, accomplishments, and contributions or experiences that hold significance to you as an applicant. You should consider including personal qualities or accomplishments that you are proud of and include the ways these helped shape who you are.
Empty Words _ Since most personal statements are about 5μ lines, you don't have space for empty statements such as 'I am a hard worker' or 'I am a people person'. How can the hiring manager ascertain that this is the truth without any evidence to back up such lofty statements? You need to give them examples of your work ethic and how it positively impacted your employer as well as evidence of your interpersonal skills.