Poor outline _ One of the most distinguishing aspects of well_written personal statement samples is a precise outline. Since a sample will serve as your guide, it should contain an outline as well, not just content. You can use the outline as a pattern when writing your own admissions essay so you will know which information to include and which ones to leave out. Statement samples, which do not contain outlines, may not be the best guides and may be of little use to applicants. Along with its personal statement content, a sample should also contain an outline so you will know how to organize your thoughts and experiences into a more solid composition.
6. REVISE, REVISE, REVISE. Have another person (several persons) critique your work. Use fellow students, trusted professors, your parents or significant other _ anyone who will read your statement closely and give you constructive advice. You, yourself, should read your statement out loud; the ear will hear errors (sentence fragments, grammatical missteps) the eye misses. Be aware of unconscious mistakes, like starting every sentence with the work "I", using cliches (example: saying you want to be a doctor to "help people"), or over_stating or exaggerating accomplishments or emotions. Once satisfied, put the statement down, do not over_write it and drain it of all intensity and enthusiasm. Lastly, think on this. Your personal statement is your opportunity to tell your "story" and a window into your humanity _ ultimately, that is what makes it engaging and memorable to the schools you are applying to.