The conclusion _ Afterwards, go over your draft and try to summarize your points. Do not suddenly introduce any new information in this section; read through the body of your paragraph again and base your concluding paragraph from it. You need to reiterate all the points you made in the body and briefly relate them to your theme to show how they are all connected. More importantly, the conclusion should reiterate your main theme and tie up to the introduction to neatly sum up your essay.
Overly Technical _ In many cases, the person reading your resume and personal statement will be part of a different department to the one where you are applying to work. Therefore, he may have no knowledge of the more technical aspects of the position so avoid the use of jargon. Your personal statement should be concise, informative and enjoyable and should be understandable to all readers. Vivid imagery always captures the attention of the reader so work on your writing skills! A strong resume needs to be backed up with an equally powerful and compelling personal statement if you want to get through to the first round of interviews. Take the time to craft your statement and you'll immediately be ahead of the majority of candidates who continue to make the above errors.