Avoid Cliches. There are a few standard reasons why people become doctors, and so it is very easy to fall into cliched expressions and ideas. Though it's fine to express a commonly_held notion, try to find a personal way to express it. For example, rather than write "I want to be a doctor because I want to help people," discuss the ways that you have shown your generosity and kindheartedness in the past; bring specific examples__such as your volunteer experiences__so as to avoid a direct (and possibly cliched) declaration of your point. Sometimes cliches are unavoidable; just make sure your essay isn't full of them.
When you allow a fresh set of eyes on your admission essay it is almost as if your personal statement is getting practice. After all, your statement will ultimately end up being read by one or more people while your application is being reviewed so it makes sense that a well read personal statement should do better in its final stages. Why have the reviewers catch the mistakes that someone else can catch beforehand? It is far better to catch a small mistake that can cost you admission, before it actually has the chance to cost you.