5. Suggest that the program can right a wrong by admitting you _ Remember that the committee members are busy professionals who are taking only a couple minutes to skim your statement. On the one hand, asserting that you will make a unique contribution to your program and bring a new perspective by adding to the diversity of their student body is a smart move and shows you as a positive, professional team player. On the other hand, asking for admission on the grounds that it will correct a previous injustice runs the risk of making you appear unqualified and/or confrontationalǒ. Be sarcastic _ This one doesn't need much explanation. Your ironic commentaries and sarcastic quips make your Facebook friends laugh, because they know you. The admissions committee does not. They can easily misinterpret sarcastic comments, or decide you're flippant, cynical, pessimistic, or a know_it_all.
When you set to create your personal statement for college, you suddenly are not in that world anymore, and you know it deep inside. Seriously, no one from admissions wants to read another essay about how much someone was inspired by Gandhi, or Martin Luther King Jr. No one wants to read your personal statement for college about the first time you played football with your dad, or learning the value of teamwork from a little league game. No matter what you write, the chance is that they have heard it all so often before, and they are surely going to hold that fact against you.