* Who will be reading the personal statement? _ How can the essay be more compelling to the readers? _ Why are you applying to this program? _ Why are you applying to this institution? _ How will attending this graduate school help you grow as an individual and prepare you for your career goals? _ What do you have to offer the graduate program? Why should a faculty member take you under his supervision?
oMake sure you haven't used over long, unwieldy sentences or paragraphs. If you have you must break these up. _ oThat you've started your personal statement with a powerful introduction so this captures your reader's attention _ straight away. oThat your structure is easy to follow and that each sentence hooks into the next line. oThat you finish with your future career goals. _ A key advantage is to use a professional to edit and improve your personal statement. If, however you are working in isolation and do not have that advantage, be wary of allowing family or friends to read and comment on it. For one thing, an outside will be objective and critical: they may be full of praise or go to the other extreme so far as style, at least, is concerned.