Check for logical flow and paragraph transition which make the statement strong and easily read. _ Read the personal statement over _ if you need to read any of the sentences twice, and then re_structure them. Have I left myself too short on an important area and too long in another? Cut and chop away until you know that this statement is strong, logical and captures the attention of the reader. If you step over a platitude or cliché _ remove and find another way. At the same time _ give yourself a limit of how many reviews you will do, otherwise you will keep chopping and changing losing the essence of what you are writing. _ Lastly, peer review _ a person or people you can trust to be brutally honest and who knows you well. Preferably someone who also understands that this personal statement is for admission to graduate school. Get several people to give you a boredom rating along with a rating of whether or not you have truly reflected who you are.
Your introduction and even your first sentence are the most important part of your personal statement. This is where you can grab the attention of the admissions representative. Make your first sentence unique and compelling. It is recommended that you state in a creative way WHY you want to undertake this field of study in your first sentence. The rest of your introduction should provide a brief explanation that supports this first statement. Divide the word limit by the three parts of your personal statement by allocating your introduction around 30%.