If you wish to use Sample Outline A, you may want to consult this simple instructional outline: Introduction Section 2 Topic sentence related to the main theme First supporting pointE vidence Topic sentence that relates the above paragraph to the next Second supporting point Evidence Topic sentence that relates the above paragraph to the next Second supporting point Evidence Conclusion Conclusion that reiterates the main theme and echoes the ideas stated in the introduction _ Making a list of all information to be disclosed _ Armed with a theme and an outline, the next step is to consider which aspects of your personal background and experiences can be shared in relation to this theme. To fully present all the information you want included, it is imperative you gather them and make a list from which you will be able to back up the thesis statements you will compose later on. Creating a list allows you to identify which information is important (e.g., why I chose this major) and which information should be considered optional in relation to your theme. Keep in mind that all information should be related to the main theme and should serve to substantiate the theme and not deviate from it.
Tension is one of the second most important elements in writing, closely allied to suspense _ the "what happens next" ingredient. The problem for many students is to try to condense the personal statement into 600 words. Obviously, the admission officer knows you only have this limited space, but nonetheless does judge you on the four minutes it takes to read your personal statement, if your personal statement includes tension and suspense _ it is sure to be a winner. The secret to a good personal statement is not to give away too much to quickly, keep us guessing, hanging onto every word, thus building up tension and suspense. In order for there to be tension in your personal statement, there must be (or have been) something important at stake. Perhaps this was your family life or what you believe is your future. Perhaps the reason why you chose the course you wish to study. Whatever it is, by not divulging the outcome too soon, you will maintain the reader's interest for that much longer. The following personal statement starts with a powerful suspense filling introduction: