After grammar and spelling, the next problem that needs be checked is transition. Read your essay. Go through it from end to end, and check to see if your essay flows smoothly. Does each sentence flow smoothly to the next? Does each paragraph flow logically to the next? Each statement should be connected or somehow related to the one before it, not thrown randomly together. Next, limit the use of "I" in the beginning of most sentences as it is already obvious that the essay is a piece written by an individual.
A PS is one of the most important components of your application because this document, when written correctly, will offer your readers, namely the admissions committee members, a quick glance into your life story so far and which direction you plan to take. You are inviting the reader to share your experiences as you disclose who you are as an applicant. Through your PS, you are providing them a general picture of your background and qualifications, knowledge of which will allow them to evaluate your suitability for admission to their school accurately.