The first place that you should look for sample personal statements is on the website of the school in which you are attempting to get into. If you can find samples of the admission essays of others who have already been accepted into the school then you can really begin to dig deep and find out what will be expected of you. Depending on the school in which you are trying to gain entry to, finding these samples can be easy or darn near impossible. When the latter happens you can always turn to the internet for help. Just as with anything else these days, the internet has an unbelievable amount of websites with samples of various types of admission essays. You can begin by conducting a Google, Yahoo, or Bing search on 'personal statement examples' and then begin to look at the different results that come up.
Check for logical flow and paragraph transition which make the statement strong and easily read. _ Read the personal statement over _ if you need to read any of the sentences twice, and then re_structure them. Have I left myself too short on an important area and too long in another? Cut and chop away until you know that this statement is strong, logical and captures the attention of the reader. If you step over a platitude or cliché _ remove and find another way. At the same time _ give yourself a limit of how many reviews you will do, otherwise you will keep chopping and changing losing the essence of what you are writing. _ Lastly, peer review _ a person or people you can trust to be brutally honest and who knows you well. Preferably someone who also understands that this personal statement is for admission to graduate school. Get several people to give you a boredom rating along with a rating of whether or not you have truly reflected who you are.