How to write a medical school personal statement: Motive _ Third is having a compelling motive. It's the underpinning of the whole essay. Unless you speak to a compelling motive, the default result from the reader's point of view is this student is writing a general medical school essay, but doesn't really know why. You've got to be willing to flaunt the motivation and be really willing to shout at the top of your lungs standing on a chair in the middle of a crowded auditorium. Be THAT committed to what you have to say. All of this sounds incredibly unrealistic and incredibly overdone, but once you put these concepts down on paper, the very act of reading mutes so much of the impact of language, that you've got to be willing to trust that you can be very committed and very over the top in how you articulate, and it will still carry off.
But you've got to sound: Like you care a lot, and like you're completely devoted to it. An example: "I am completely devoted to medicine for the rest of my life. It's everything for me because it's the only thing that's going to allow me to express who I am personally and professionally." High_impact language has this very strong absolute, emotionally rich, concrete side to it where as a reader I am completely engrossed, engaged, enmeshed. I buy it. I believe you. Some of the best places to look for this kind of writing is where there is someone who is making a very impassioned speech. One of the best places that I know is in the most powerful, compelling, moving speeches of our time. Like Martin Luther King's "I Have A Dream," or speeches by Gandhi, or speeches by John F. Kennedy, or speeches by Barack Obama. Speeches that really elevate you and make you feel that there's hope for you, hope for us and that there's something bigger to strive for.