The body _ To compose the body, go back to your theme and identify the major ideas that could support that theme (which has now become your main thesis statement). Each point should be supported by specific evidence, examples, or arguments. Quantify your achievements and use clear, positive language. Write about unique personal information because this is what the evaluations committee wants to read. Continue brainstorming. Write the topic sentence for your first body paragraph. Make sure it provides a focus for your paragraph and is not overly general. Do the same for the other body paragraphs. To generate interest, try searching for examples related to the literature (direct quotes, paraphrasing, etc.) that you can use in your first body paragraph. Use your outline as guide and present the information in full sentences that flow logically from one to the next. After writing down all your points, arrange these points such that they smoothly follow one section after another. Next, write your concluding statements for each paragraph. Note that it should clearly state the point you are trying to make and lead it into your next body paragraph. Use concrete examples from your life experiences to support your theme and distinguish yourself from other applicants.
When you allow a fresh set of eyes on your admission essay it is almost as if your personal statement is getting practice. After all, your statement will ultimately end up being read by one or more people while your application is being reviewed so it makes sense that a well read personal statement should do better in its final stages. Why have the reviewers catch the mistakes that someone else can catch beforehand? It is far better to catch a small mistake that can cost you admission, before it actually has the chance to cost you.