Empty Words _ Since most personal statements are about 5μ lines, you don't have space for empty statements such as 'I am a hard worker' or 'I am a people person'. How can the hiring manager ascertain that this is the truth without any evidence to back up such lofty statements? You need to give them examples of your work ethic and how it positively impacted your employer as well as evidence of your interpersonal skills.
An integrating conclusion _ Finally, the concluding section wraps up the essay neatly and reminds the reader of its purpose. The conclusion should deftly integrate all information presented. One method to ensure consistency is echoing in the conclusion the ideas presented in the introduction. More on this will be explained in a latter section of this booklet.