Face it there are only so many spots on the roster with the school you may be looking to gain access to. Reviewers will be looking over countless application as well as countless personal statements which allows you a great opportunity to stand out from the rest by writing a statement that is leaps and bounds above the rest. By doing so, you are giving yourself a great leg up on the competition. When you go about employing the fresh eyes others to look over your personal statement before you turn it in, you will be ensuring that your one shot to impress is in fact your best shot.
In order for there to be tension in your personal statement, it will help to describe a highly charged incident, part of a particularly difficult period in your life. Whatever it was, you will maintain your reader's interest for that much longer. The example below shows perfect tension and suspense build up _ "When the airmail letter arrived bearing an American stamp, I knew immediately, it was from my university with my degree results, and I tore it open as excitedly as if it were a birthday present. With trembling fingers, I took out the sheets of thin blue paper _ and my heart started to pound as I began to read."